YO SEAN ITS AMR

yo sup gerimi and sean i cant make it today this is amr kawji becuz i dont have a ride BUT......what i can do is brodcast via webcam so please lemme no sean has my cell i think.......o well seea guys l8tr and try to have some fun w/o me LOL bye guys

Hi Afra!

You did a great job but I think that you can Crystallize this further. You should add more detail to each scene -and I don't know what you want to ask your interviewees so make sure that you bullet your questions.

Here are a few amendment questions:


“Cliques”by Afra Siddiqui
1. EXT. Universal School – Morning - est. shot
-describe what your shot is. Make this detailed! You are selling your entire story in this first scene! Make it interesting.

2. INT. Universal School –Morning
Students coming in (fewer frames) or POV of a student walking in (fewer frames)
then
(more frames so it’s slower) get everyone socializing in their own groups
(should the camera be moving, weaving in and out of groups up and down or should it just be different shots of the different groups)
then
sound of bell ringing-everyone empties the hallways going into their classrooms-the dissolve thing V.O. (Voice-over)interview with Amira Matareyeh
Questions to ask:


-Better -but you need to be specific. Instead of saying fewer or more frames... say slow-mo shots of kids - or sped-up shots, and if you can think of a better way of saying that, then do so!... But be specific with what you want. Treat it this way... you want your words to be chrystal enough to have anyone reading understand what they would need to do to acquire the visuals you created in your mind.


INT. classroom – morning
Montage of the students in classCUT TO:
ext. Universal school-time morning
Turns, focuses on car, zooms out and is inside the principal’s office

-Break it down! Get more specific: What color is the car? What kind of wood for the desk? What is the principle wearing? What does the sky look like outside? Is one of the tires flat? Does the teacher have a funny sign on his or her desk?... we want to know what you have in your brain?!?! really take some ownership and pre-visualise it!
-you are at a great point to start adding some detail here so congratulations!

Questions to ask Principle:


-Bullet the questions.

If the answer has something that can be shown, cut to image of that, then go back to the principal, maybe different view like profile or ?

-make visuals based on your bulleted questions.

Turns, zoom in on sign in office
Get pics of the nov. 5th movement and have v.o. talking about it

Go btw. Images of society and cliques in school
Have leaders at the end, play the end of A Dream by common, v.o. of freedom then credits

-I don't understand what you mean. Please be more specific here too.




-you did a really good job with this! We look forward to seeing the next phase in this story.


Peace,

Sean

how's it look

I don't have a fancy title or anything and this is just what i have so far, any suggestions because it looks kind of boring and I'm not even sure I'm doing it right


“Cliques”by Afra Siddiqui
1. EXT. Universal School – Morning - est. shot
2. INT. Universal School –Morning
Students coming in (fewer frames) or POV of a student walking in (fewer frames)
then
(more frames so it’s slower) get everyone socializing in their own groups
(should the camera be moving, weaving in and out of groups up and down or should it just be different shots of the different groups)
then
sound of bell ringing-everyone empties the hallways going into their classrooms-the dissolve thing V.O. (Voice-over)interview with Amira Matareyeh
Questions to ask:

INT. classroom – morning
Montage of the students in classCUT TO:
ext. Universal school-time morning
Turns, focuses on car, zooms out and is inside the principal’s office
Questions to ask Principle:

If the answer has something that can be shown, cut to image of that, then go back to the principal, maybe different view like profile or ?

Turns, zoom in on sign in office
Get pics of the nov. 5th movement and have v.o. talking about it

Go btw. Images of society and cliques in school
Have leaders at the end, play the end of A Dream by common, v.o. of freedom then credits

CELL PHONE VIDEOS!!

Hey Iman Kids!!

Jeremiah here, wanting to tell you all you did a great job on Saturday!! Your videos are posted right now online: if you go to www.pahnation.com and then click on "theater" there will be a scroll-bar where you can choose Crystal Lake '08. From there a video window will pop open and on the left-hand bottom side you can see the Circus Vision option. Aala, Afra, Amr, Darnitrea, and Nasr's video are all posted so you can show your friends and families! I don't think they posted a winner yet, so I think you guys can still vote for your videos. Sean and I were really impressed with your creativity! Now transfer some of that into your stories! Remember, you can use the blog anytime with any questions about your docs!! We're looking forward to seeing you guys in less than 2 weeks, which is still a ways away. So everyone should be thinking about your stories: Remember!

1) What is your story and your message?
2) How do you want to present your message? What is the Point of View?
3) Who would you want to interview? Do you want to do the Narration yourself?
4) Use the blog to ask questions!!!!

Good luck!