wat up

I will probly come to iman saterday

YO SEAN ITS AMR

yo sup gerimi and sean i cant make it today this is amr kawji becuz i dont have a ride BUT......what i can do is brodcast via webcam so please lemme no sean has my cell i think.......o well seea guys l8tr and try to have some fun w/o me LOL bye guys

Hi Afra!

You did a great job but I think that you can Crystallize this further. You should add more detail to each scene -and I don't know what you want to ask your interviewees so make sure that you bullet your questions.

Here are a few amendment questions:


“Cliques”by Afra Siddiqui
1. EXT. Universal School – Morning - est. shot
-describe what your shot is. Make this detailed! You are selling your entire story in this first scene! Make it interesting.

2. INT. Universal School –Morning
Students coming in (fewer frames) or POV of a student walking in (fewer frames)
then
(more frames so it’s slower) get everyone socializing in their own groups
(should the camera be moving, weaving in and out of groups up and down or should it just be different shots of the different groups)
then
sound of bell ringing-everyone empties the hallways going into their classrooms-the dissolve thing V.O. (Voice-over)interview with Amira Matareyeh
Questions to ask:


-Better -but you need to be specific. Instead of saying fewer or more frames... say slow-mo shots of kids - or sped-up shots, and if you can think of a better way of saying that, then do so!... But be specific with what you want. Treat it this way... you want your words to be chrystal enough to have anyone reading understand what they would need to do to acquire the visuals you created in your mind.


INT. classroom – morning
Montage of the students in classCUT TO:
ext. Universal school-time morning
Turns, focuses on car, zooms out and is inside the principal’s office

-Break it down! Get more specific: What color is the car? What kind of wood for the desk? What is the principle wearing? What does the sky look like outside? Is one of the tires flat? Does the teacher have a funny sign on his or her desk?... we want to know what you have in your brain?!?! really take some ownership and pre-visualise it!
-you are at a great point to start adding some detail here so congratulations!

Questions to ask Principle:


-Bullet the questions.

If the answer has something that can be shown, cut to image of that, then go back to the principal, maybe different view like profile or ?

-make visuals based on your bulleted questions.

Turns, zoom in on sign in office
Get pics of the nov. 5th movement and have v.o. talking about it

Go btw. Images of society and cliques in school
Have leaders at the end, play the end of A Dream by common, v.o. of freedom then credits

-I don't understand what you mean. Please be more specific here too.




-you did a really good job with this! We look forward to seeing the next phase in this story.


Peace,

Sean

how's it look

I don't have a fancy title or anything and this is just what i have so far, any suggestions because it looks kind of boring and I'm not even sure I'm doing it right


“Cliques”by Afra Siddiqui
1. EXT. Universal School – Morning - est. shot
2. INT. Universal School –Morning
Students coming in (fewer frames) or POV of a student walking in (fewer frames)
then
(more frames so it’s slower) get everyone socializing in their own groups
(should the camera be moving, weaving in and out of groups up and down or should it just be different shots of the different groups)
then
sound of bell ringing-everyone empties the hallways going into their classrooms-the dissolve thing V.O. (Voice-over)interview with Amira Matareyeh
Questions to ask:

INT. classroom – morning
Montage of the students in classCUT TO:
ext. Universal school-time morning
Turns, focuses on car, zooms out and is inside the principal’s office
Questions to ask Principle:

If the answer has something that can be shown, cut to image of that, then go back to the principal, maybe different view like profile or ?

Turns, zoom in on sign in office
Get pics of the nov. 5th movement and have v.o. talking about it

Go btw. Images of society and cliques in school
Have leaders at the end, play the end of A Dream by common, v.o. of freedom then credits

CELL PHONE VIDEOS!!

Hey Iman Kids!!

Jeremiah here, wanting to tell you all you did a great job on Saturday!! Your videos are posted right now online: if you go to www.pahnation.com and then click on "theater" there will be a scroll-bar where you can choose Crystal Lake '08. From there a video window will pop open and on the left-hand bottom side you can see the Circus Vision option. Aala, Afra, Amr, Darnitrea, and Nasr's video are all posted so you can show your friends and families! I don't think they posted a winner yet, so I think you guys can still vote for your videos. Sean and I were really impressed with your creativity! Now transfer some of that into your stories! Remember, you can use the blog anytime with any questions about your docs!! We're looking forward to seeing you guys in less than 2 weeks, which is still a ways away. So everyone should be thinking about your stories: Remember!

1) What is your story and your message?
2) How do you want to present your message? What is the Point of View?
3) Who would you want to interview? Do you want to do the Narration yourself?
4) Use the blog to ask questions!!!!

Good luck!

Hey sean this is amr

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ideas for aala's film

Hey Aala -

Sean is right... You have a good idea but now you need to think about how you want to Visualize your piece. We know that Drugs is your "Burning Issue" and this is what you want to discuss in your documentary. One thing to think of is "What is your POV? Or Point of View." Meaning, how will the story reveal itself to the audience. Do you know anyone with a drug problem that you truly care about that would be a potential subject or interview? Is there a particular incident in the history of drugs that is important??? One thing you have to take into consideration is that the topic of "Drugs being bad" is a very open and broad subject. There are millions of drugs that affect millions of people in many negative ways. Most recently there has been a big boom in Pharmaceutical Drugs that are being funneled into public use by prescription or other ways. People have died because they were taking too many different prescriptions that dont react well with each other. And even talking about the Pharmaceutical Drugs is still a big topic....Just something to think about. Another thing that might help like Sean said, is thinking about the film you would like to Watch. How would the film you want to make look? The more specific you get the easier it will be to convey your message in a more powerful way. Also, its generally good to use your experiences and memories as a way of fueling your documentary. Finding your perspective (or finding WHO and HOW the story is being told).

1) What do you want to say? Find your VOICE / and your Perspective
2) Who do you want to say it to? Find your Audience


There can be many ways to visualize your piece. Good luck! And feel free to let us know if you are still stuck.
Making your own film is tough ! But rewarding, the developing stages now are key to your documentary later!!
:)
- jeremiah